一、教学背景分析

【教材内容】

本节课为读后续写讲评课，内容为高二双语报第34期A4版的读后续写，课堂以动作描写为切入点，引导学生对范文中的动作描写进行观察并总结，然后把知识点的迁移运用到另一篇读后续写中，奠定学生对读后续写中动作描写的认知。

【课标要求】

国家英语课程标准明确地指出：“英语课程的总体目标是培养学生的综合语言运用能力。综合语言运用能力的形成建立在学生语言技能、语言知识、情感态度、学习策略和文化意识等素养整体发展的基础上。”因此，语言知识是综合语言运用能力的重要基础。

【教材分析】

读后续写属于综合性语言测试，是将阅读与写作紧密结合的考查形式，主要考查学生的文本解读能力、合理想象能力、情节构思能力、创新表达能力和语言运用能力。为了成功完成故事，学生必须仔细阅读给定材料，对整个信息进行全面分析，以获得主要思想，然后感知写作风格，最后完成写作任务。而动词的使用是关系到句子是否正确并且精彩的参考标准。也是判断一个学生英语水平的高低的重要依据。通过本课的教学，教会学生如何能够正确地写出句子、如何能更地道更优美地表述记叙文。

【学情分析】

高二（2）班是文科普通班，大部分学生学习态度端正，学习热情一般，缺乏一定的探索研究问题的能力。文章的解读、主题的升华、语言的准确和丰富都是学生写作的薄弱环节。通过写前指导，大部分学生对文章的解读、主题的升华基本都能准确掌握。但在批改作文的过程中，发现学生在语言的准确性和丰富性方面尤为欠缺。故本节讲评课以动词为突破点，侧重学习非谓语作宾补、状语以及并列谓语在写作中的具体运用，采用学用结合的方法，从而达到预期的效果。

二、目标

【教学目标】

在本课学习结束时，学生能够：

1.了解非谓语作宾补、状语在读后续写中的运用。

2.了解并列谓语在读后续写中的运用。

3.通过课堂活动使学生创造性思维得以体现，让学生在愉快的学习气氛中体验学习的乐趣，使学生树立信心。

【教学程序】

以了解、学习研究英语的方法为基础，掌握知识为中心，培养能力为方向，紧抓重点突破难点，设计任务教学法进行教学。整节课遵循“观察—分析—发现—归纳—练习—总结—巩固”的教学程序。

【教学重点】

1.准确理解并正确使用非谓语作宾补、状语以及并列谓语在读后续写中的运用。

2.学会句子结构分析，养成正确表达的习惯。

【教学难点】

帮助学生将已学习过的知识转化为技能，从而培养其对语言的综合运用能力。

【教学策略】

本课以任务型教学（Task-basedLanguageTeaching）作为课堂教学设计之理念，具体采用情景教学法、讨论法、演示法等。在教学中突出自主学习与合作学习的意识培养和输出性练习，注重语言知识的实际运用，坚持“教师为主导，学生为主体，任务为基础”的教学原则，激发学生参与课堂，在做中学。

【课前准备】 高二英语双语报第34期、多媒体课件、学案、黑板和粉笔

【课的类型】读后续写讲评课

【课时安排】1课时（40分钟）

三、教学活动（表1）

四、教学反思

本课教学主题明确，教学目标清晰，活动设计围绕动词是如何使用进行。通过非谓语作宾补、非谓语作状语以及并列动词的反复操练，达到了预期的目标。时间分配也比较合理，解决了本节课的重难点问题。教师在教学过程中注重关注不同层次的学生，关注各层次学生对知识的掌握程度。整节课的学习气氛活跃，学生表现积极，小组间的各种活动也能顺利进行，学生在学习过程中体会到了学习英语的乐趣。

需要改进的地方：

由于时间限制，写作任务对于个别学生而言还是有难度的，导致教学容量不够大，教师需要进一步简化写作任务或采取合作的方式完成。

我的困惑之处：

如何让学生更高效地完成写作任务？

读后续写讲评课导学案

——高二读后续写之动作描写

【课前自主学习】

Task：欣赏范文，圈出文中的动词，并体会用法。

附原文材料：双语报第34期A4版

I had a younger sister，Michelle. But as a big brother，I rarely cared for her.

On a Sunday in March when I was 8，Easter came. As usual，my sister and I would search for the hidden baskets full candy and other things prepared for us. On that Easter morning，I got up early.

“Michelle！” I whispered to my sister，who was still sleeping in her bedroom. “Wake up. It's Easter. We have to go and find our baskets.” She rolled over in bed and finally got up. “Mom and Dad are still sleeping，” I warned her as we walked out into the kitchen. “If we're quiet，we can find our baskets without waking them up.”

It didn't take long for me to find my basket，which had candy，toys，etc. This basket was obviously mine because it contained the latest issue of my favorite magazine. My sister continued searching in every room while I dropped my basket off at the kitchen table and started separating candy into different categories. 20 minutes later，my sister told me，“I can’t find it. I looked all over. Can you help me？” I decided to help her not because I felt sorry for her but because I thought it was fun to find the missing basket.

We started searching through the cabinets（贮藏柜） where

my mom kept her pots and pans. Later，our parents were awake. Dad headed straight for the bathroom，while Mom walked out to make coffee. “Mom，I've found my basket，” I told her. She smiled and asked，“Where's yours，Michelle？”

That's when my six-year-old sister started to cry. “Let's keep looking，” Mom said，taking hold of my sister's hand. After searching the living room，they went to the closet（储藏室）. there Michelle finally found her basket. But when she picked up her basket，we found everything in it had all been bitten and damaged by mice.

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Michelle dropped her basket on the floor，looking upset.

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Then I walked slowly into my sister's room with my basket.

参考范文

Michelle dropped her basket on the floor，looking upset. Then she returned to her bedroom. “Just leave me alone，” I heard her voice as Mom followed her to the door. As I sat at the kitchen table reading my magazine and enjoying candy，I suddenly felt something I had never felt towards my sister before. I felt sad and sorry for her. So I dropped my magazine and put the rest of my candy back into my Easter basket.

Then I walked slowly into my sister's room with my basket. I found her crying quietly under her covers. “I'm sorry，Michelle，” I said. But she didn't respond. I left my basket beside her bed and got back into my bed to read my magazine. And then，through the thin plastic door between our rooms，I heard the weak sound of candy being unwrapped. I smiled，lay back on my pillow，and put on my headphones. That was the last time I ever saw my sister cry.

【课中重难点突破】

Task1：观察范文，关注范文中的动词是如何使用的。

Michelle dropped her basket on the floor，looking upset. Then she returned to her bedroom. “Just leave me alone，” I heard her voice as Mom followed her to the door. As I sat at the kitchen table reading my magazine and enjoying candy，I suddenly felt something I had never felt towards my sister before. I felt sad and sorry for her. So I dropped my magazine and put the rest of my candy back into my Easter basket.

Then I walked slowly into my sister's room with my basket. I found her crying quietly under her covers. “I'm sorry，Michelle，” I said. But she didn't respond. I left my basket beside her bed and got back into my bed to read my magazine. And then，through the thin plastic door between our rooms，I heard the weak sound of candy being unwrapped. I smiled，lay back on my pillow，and put on my headphones. That was the last time I ever saw my sister cry.

1. （1）I found her crying quietly under her covers.

（2）I heard the weak sound of candy being unwrapped.

总结：

回归课文：

Do you find it funny to see someone sliding on a banana skin，bumping into someone else round a corner，or falling down a hole in the road？（B4U3）当你看到有人踩在香蕉皮上滑倒，在拐角处撞到别人，或者掉进路上的洞里，你会觉得很有趣吗？

2.（1）Michelle dropped her basket on the floor，looking upset.

（2）As I sat at the kitchen table reading my magazine and enjoying candy...

总结：

回归课文：

（1） I stood for a minute watching them and then went to greet them.（B4U4）我站在那里看了他们一会儿，然后走过去和他们打招呼。

（2） Finding that Zhinv was heart-broken，her grandmother finally decided to let the couple cross the Milky Way to meet.（B3U1）看到织女伤心欲绝，最后王母娘娘决定让这对夫妻每年跨过银河相会一次。

3.（1）So I dropped my magazine and put the rest of my candy back into my Easter basket.

（2）I left my basket beside her bed and got back into my bed to read my magazine.

（3）I smiled，lay back on my pillow，and put on my headphones.

总结：

回归课文：

（1） Tony approached Julia，touched her shoulder and kissed her on the cheek. （B4U4）托尼接近茱莉亚，摸了摸她的肩膀，并亲吻她的脸颊。

（2） She screamed，pushed him away and ran to her room for the rest of the day.（B7U2）她尖叫了起来，把他推开，跑回她的房里，那天她就再也没有出来过。

Task2小试牛刀：

Examples：

1.当我们回到学校时，我们发现一个陌生人站在门口。

When we returned to the school， we found a stranger standing at the entrance.

2.老人坐在日落下，一边看报纸，一边听收音机。

The old man sat under the sunset， reading the newspaper and listening to the radio.

3.孩子坐在父亲的肩膀上，开心地笑了。

Sitting on her father's shoulders，the child laughed happily.

4.珍妮扑倒在床上哭了起来。

Jenny threw herself onto the bed and cried.

5.那人把手伸进口袋，掏出几枚硬币，放在男孩手里。

The man reached into his pocket，took out some coins and placed them into the boy's hand.

Group A

1. 我感到有人在拍我的肩膀。

2.她会兴奋地下车，又笑又跳。

3.看到这些，他们都突然大笑起来。

4.他跳下公共汽车，冲向最近的派出所。

5.男孩们兴奋地冲到湖边，脱下衣服跳进了水里。

Group B

1.我们看见窗户里有盏灯在亮。

2.他和我握手，说遇见我很幸运。

3.听说你要来，我迫不及待地想见你。

4.我们一大早就起了床，直奔目的地。

5.歌手看了观众一眼，深吸一口气，开始唱起来。

Step3重写作文。（2020浙江1月高考）

“I'm going to miss you so much，Poppy，” said the tall，thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up，hugged his parents，and smiled，trying not to let his emotions（情绪） get the better of him.

His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.

The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder，and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it，” he said. “I'll see you back home in a month，okay？” His parents nodded，and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy's mother turned to the dog，“Okay，Poppy，time to go back home.”

The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week，Poppy didn't seem interested in her dinner，her favorite toy，or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too，but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didn't.

They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa，but the old girl just wasn't her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried. “What should we do to cheer Poppy up？” asked Dad. “We've tried everything.”

“I have an idea，but it might be a little crazy，” smiled Mom. “Without anybody left in the house but us，this place could use a bit of fun. Let's get a little dog for Poppy.

It didn't take long before they walked through the front door carrying a bigbox. Poppy welcomed them home as usual but when she saw the box，she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail began wagging（摆动）ever so slowly，then faster as she caught the smell.

Paragraph 1： Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared.

Paragraph 2：A few weeks later，the boy arrived home from university. 

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它抬起毛茸茸的头，好奇地抬头看着。波比一看到小狗，就高兴地摇着尾巴到处跑。然后，她回来了，试图帮助狗走出盒子，但失败了。看到这儿，爸爸妈妈忍不住笑了起来。妈妈轻轻地摸了摸它的头，把它从盒子里拿起来放在地板上。让父母感到欣慰和高兴的是，这两只狗似乎马上就成了朋友，一起愉快地玩耍。波比变得像以前一样快乐，似乎她已经忘记了她的老朋友——那个男孩。

①raise its head，look up

②run around，wag her tail

③come back，try to help the dog out of the box

④see，could not help laughing

⑤touch，pick it up，put

⑥seem to，play

⑦become，seem that

【课后巩固】

Homework：续写第二段内容。

Paragraph 2：A few weeks later，the boy arrived home from university. 

看到波比，他弯下腰拥抱她问好。但出乎意料的是，波比转身离开了。男孩对此感到非常抱歉，这时波比兴奋地带着一只小狗跑过来。它们高兴地跳上跳下，眼睛里闪闪发光，汪汪叫着，不时地嗅着他的脚。知道波比上大学时发生的事，男孩很受感动。他把老女孩和小狗抱在怀里，眼里涌出了泪水。现在他有了两个忠实的朋友。

①see，bend down to hug her②turn away，leave③feel sorry，come④jump，sparkle，bark，sniff⑤know，was moved⑥take... in his arms，well up⑦have

Keys

（用了find/ hear sb doing的结构，即非谓语作宾补）

（用了V，doing （and doing）的结构，即非谓语作状语）

（用了A and B或A，B and C的结构，即并列动词）

1.I felt somebody patting me on the shoulder.

2.he would get off the car excitedly， laughing and dancing around.

3.Seeing this，they all burst into laughter.

4.He jumped off the bus and rushed into the nearest police station.

5.The boys rushed excitedly to the lake， took off their clothes and jumped into the water.

1.We saw a light burning in the window.

2.He shook hands with me，saying that he was lucky to meet me.

3.Hearing that you're coming，I can hardly wait to see you.

4.We got up early in the morning and headed for the destination.

5.The singer glanced at the audience， took a deep breath and began to sing.

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Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared. It raised its furry head，looking up curiously. At the sight of the little dog，Poppy ran around happily，wagging her tail. Then，she came back，trying to help the dog out of the box，but failed. Seeing this，Dad and Mom could not help laughing. Mom gently touched its head，picked it up from the box and put it on the floor. Much to the parents' relief and happiness，the two dogs seemed to be friends immediately，playing together happily. Poppy became as happy as before and it seemed that she had already forgotten her old friend—— the boy.

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A few weeks later，the boy arrived home from university. Seeing Poppy，he bent down to hug her hello. But unexpectedly，Poppy turned away and left. The boy was feeling extremely sorry about it when Poppy came running excitedly with a little dog. They jumped up and down cheerfully，their eyes sparkling with delight，barking and sniffing at his feet now and then. Knowing what had happened to Poppy when he was at university，the boy was greatly moved. He took the old girl and the little puppy in his arms，tears welling up in his eyes. Now he had two devoted friends.

【本文系广州市增城区课题“基于核心素养的高中英语写作教学课例研究”（课题编号：ZC2020066）成果】